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Can-Utility Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 Trains is better Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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An Enemy Without Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 I'm sorry, but there's a difference between inspiration and plagiarism. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fledgehog Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 don't listen to the haters, your first song is fantastic! I nearly wet myself laughing . Maybe next you can parody Blackest Eyes or Lightbulb Sun? just a suggestion! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Not Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 http://reaction.ralfvandenboom.nl/img/nPGqkyuIwF.png Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nate2112 Posted September 17, 2011 Author Share Posted September 17, 2011 Ok haters what about the second one. Is that good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
USB Connector Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 QUOTE (Nate2112 @ Sep 17 2011, 04:51 PM) Ok haters what about the second one. Is that good You're the one who just paraphrased the song. If you think you're not plagiarizing then go ahead, hand it in. While you're at it tell the teacher/judges what inspired you and recommend they look it up. Make sure to have someone take a picture of your face when they tell you about plagiarism and how it relates to your first poem. And since you asked, I'll tell you again you second one is decent, but it needs some work. The tone seems a little disjointed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Can-Utility Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 I'm 12 and what is plagiarism Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Not Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 QUOTE (Nate2112 @ Sep 17 2011, 01:51 PM) Ok haters what about the second one. Is that good http://i.imgur.com/CAZEh.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fledgehog Posted September 17, 2011 Share Posted September 17, 2011 QUOTE (Kenneth @ Sep 17 2011, 06:17 PM) QUOTE (Nate2112 @ Sep 17 2011, 01:51 PM) Ok haters what about the second one. Is that good http://i.imgur.com/CAZEh.jpg Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nate2112 Posted September 18, 2011 Author Share Posted September 18, 2011 QUOTE (Kenneth @ Sep 17 2011, 05:17 PM) QUOTE (Nate2112 @ Sep 17 2011, 01:51 PM) Ok haters what about the second one. Is that good http://i.imgur.com/CAZEh.jpg Ignoring the fricking plagerism, how the hell did you do that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fledgehog Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 QUOTE (Nate2112 @ Sep 17 2011, 08:35 PM) QUOTE (Kenneth @ Sep 17 2011, 05:17 PM) QUOTE (Nate2112 @ Sep 17 2011, 01:51 PM) Ok haters what about the second one. Is that good http://i.imgur.com/CAZEh.jpg Ignoring the fricking plagerism, how the hell did you do that with SCIENCE Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
That One Guy Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 Plagiarism, now with 20% more science Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CMWriter Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 (edited) QUOTE (Can-Utility @ Sep 17 2011, 04:51 PM) I'm 12 and what is plagiarism Plagiarism is creative theft. In other words, it's a crime. High school teachers will be all over you for it, just you wait. And it's about a million times as serious in college. Nate, I would take the advice of the above people and drop the first piece. It's just safer. And "writing your ass off" is only achieved when you take on NaNoWriMo. Just sayin'. I like the visual imagery in the second piece; I really do. You've got something solid going on right there. Personally I think you could focus solely on the nature/narrator aspect and leave out the girl, but that's just me. Or leave it as a neutral observer; really entwine her into the setting. If you've ever read The Scarlet Letter it's a great reference. Maybe see how the author compares Pearl (the MC's daughter) to nature. It's not a poem but writing in general. Not my favourite book but I liked the analogies. (: Good luck! Write on! Edited September 18, 2011 by CMWriter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
An Enemy Without Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 QUOTE (CMWriter @ Sep 17 2011, 10:00 PM) QUOTE (Can-Utility @ Sep 17 2011, 04:51 PM) I'm 12 and what is plagiarism Plagiarism is creative theft. In other words, it's a crime. High school teachers will be all over you for it, just you wait. And it's about a million times as serious in college. Nate, I would take the advice of the above people and drop the first piece. It's just safer. And "writing your ass off" is only achieved when you take on NaNoWriMo. Just sayin'. I like the visual imagery in the second piece; I really do. You've got something solid going on right there. Personally I think you could focus solely on the nature/narrator aspect and leave out the girl, but that's just me. Or leave it as a neutral observer; really entwine her into the setting. If you've ever read The Scarlet Letter it's a great reference. Maybe see how the author compares Pearl (the MC's daughter) to nature. It's not a poem but writing in general. Not my favourite book but I liked the analogies. (: Good luck! Write on! It's like identity theft combined with the death penalty. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nate2112 Posted September 18, 2011 Author Share Posted September 18, 2011 QUOTE (An Enemy Without @ Sep 17 2011, 11:10 PM) QUOTE (CMWriter @ Sep 17 2011, 10:00 PM) QUOTE (Can-Utility @ Sep 17 2011, 04:51 PM) I'm 12 and what is plagiarism Plagiarism is creative theft. In other words, it's a crime. High school teachers will be all over you for it, just you wait. And it's about a million times as serious in college. Nate, I would take the advice of the above people and drop the first piece. It's just safer. And "writing your ass off" is only achieved when you take on NaNoWriMo. Just sayin'. I like the visual imagery in the second piece; I really do. You've got something solid going on right there. Personally I think you could focus solely on the nature/narrator aspect and leave out the girl, but that's just me. Or leave it as a neutral observer; really entwine her into the setting. If you've ever read The Scarlet Letter it's a great reference. Maybe see how the author compares Pearl (the MC's daughter) to nature. It's not a poem but writing in general. Not my favourite book but I liked the analogies. (: Good luck! Write on! It's like identity theft combined with the death penalty. End the discussion on plagerism please, I feel horrible about everyone putting me down. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Can-Utility Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 I'd suggest not plagiarizing then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
An Enemy Without Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 QUOTE (Nate2112 @ Sep 18 2011, 10:20 AM) QUOTE (An Enemy Without @ Sep 17 2011, 11:10 PM) QUOTE (CMWriter @ Sep 17 2011, 10:00 PM) QUOTE (Can-Utility @ Sep 17 2011, 04:51 PM) I'm 12 and what is plagiarism Plagiarism is creative theft. In other words, it's a crime. High school teachers will be all over you for it, just you wait. And it's about a million times as serious in college. Nate, I would take the advice of the above people and drop the first piece. It's just safer. And "writing your ass off" is only achieved when you take on NaNoWriMo. Just sayin'. I like the visual imagery in the second piece; I really do. You've got something solid going on right there. Personally I think you could focus solely on the nature/narrator aspect and leave out the girl, but that's just me. Or leave it as a neutral observer; really entwine her into the setting. If you've ever read The Scarlet Letter it's a great reference. Maybe see how the author compares Pearl (the MC's daughter) to nature. It's not a poem but writing in general. Not my favourite book but I liked the analogies. (: Good luck! Write on! It's like identity theft combined with the death penalty. End the discussion on plagerism please, I feel horrible about everyone putting me down. Don't worry about it. You're still learning. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nate2112 Posted September 18, 2011 Author Share Posted September 18, 2011 (edited) The Falling The stream has brought me into the highest meaning And has come once again into being The march has come colder than invited And the ether rises loftily into once never been sighted The doves slowly singing their song on the bare oak branches With the fate of the earth echoing with midnight chants Ever so gently the falls begin the pouring And ever so quietly begin the soaring Spring comes gliding into nothing And the forge ever glowing into scathing I'm still writing it Edited September 18, 2011 by Nate2112 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Can-Utility Posted September 18, 2011 Share Posted September 18, 2011 I like how you end it with the statement "I'm still writing it" very original Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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