Prime Mover and Shaker Posted October 4, 2015 Share Posted October 4, 2015 Hey guys - new song. It's a bit darker than most of my songs, and a bit less definite in theme. Lyrically, it was a bit of a stream-of-consciousness approach. The vocal melody in the verses is a tip of the hat to some Tool approaches to vocal rhythm. It hoping it will work better with a more talented vocalist. The energy goes up and down a bit; I was going for a dynamic approach given that there are really only a couple of chords that dominate the whole song. For those of you unfamiliar with my work, and working style.... I've been posting rough demos for years, gathering folks' feedback in the hopes of better polishing these songs when the time comes to record the real deal. I'll be playing bass and keys on most songs, that's probably it. I will neither be singing nor playing guitar on the final product; what you hear here is merely an attempt at these trades in order to give someone who knows what they are doing an idea of what I'm thinking. So, click below for "I Don't Want to Me", and let me know what you think of the composition. Thanks! http://rushmessageboard.com/public/style_emoticons/default/smile.png http://jaypsi.com/Featured_Song.html Feel free to poke around the site & check out the other demos as well. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Not Posted October 5, 2015 Share Posted October 5, 2015 Really not my thing, but that's no surprise because Tool isn't either... Since this is my first time listening to anything by you, I decided to switch over and pick another song at random, "Little Less, Little More" -- now this is good. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stoopid Posted October 6, 2015 Share Posted October 6, 2015 The build is solid until you pull the rug out from under me and the verse starts. It's a huge energy suck at the point where it feels like something else should happen there. The other real slow stuff doesn't work either, and the repeating "I don't want to" stuff doesn't have much life in this performance (perhaps it would be better executed by other musicians, hard to envision that with this version). The song acts like it wants to build to a climax, then goes limp. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prime Mover and Shaker Posted October 6, 2015 Author Share Posted October 6, 2015 Thanks guys - this is the mirror I can't give to myself... you know what I mean! :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stoopid Posted October 9, 2015 Share Posted October 9, 2015 Thanks guys - this is the mirror I can't give to myself... you know what I mean! :P I usually need 2-200 days away from material to find things to improve/envision. Maybe set this one aside and come back to it later and see if it still works for you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JARG Posted October 19, 2015 Share Posted October 19, 2015 Think link now points to "The Scut Farkus Affair" (as it became known). That's a fun song, but it doesn't seem to go anywhere. It feels like an overlong intro. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Verena Posted November 28, 2015 Share Posted November 28, 2015 The composition interests a listener in the first thirty seconds. The progressive influences on the instruments is noticeable. I like the dim atmosphere on the instruments and lyrics. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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